#Flash4Storms | My First [And Perhaps Last] 50-Word Flash Fiction Story

… and now for something completely different.

Sarah Brentyn at the blog, Lemon Shark, is hosting a flash fiction challenge to raise funds for hurricane victims. Read more about the specifics of the challenge here: Flash Fiction Prompt for Hurricane Relief #Flash4Storms.

I’ve never written flash fiction before, however Allie P. did this challenge here on her blog, Allie Potts Writesand she’s one of the cool kids, so I’m following her lead. Thus I give you my first [and perhaps last] 50-word flash fiction story.

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The knock at the door was soft, but the weeping was loud. Mirabelle asked: “have you seen my mommy?”

Wanting to help, the neighbor called around, learning that her mommy had forgotten kindergarten dismissed early today.

Meanwhile Mirabelle waited, sitting on the sofa, shredding her tissue, forlorn, and plotting revenge.

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Ally Bean

Observant. Creative. Humorous. Adaptable. Happy enough. Looking for the crumb of truth in the cookie of life.

53 thoughts on “#Flash4Storms | My First [And Perhaps Last] 50-Word Flash Fiction Story”

  1. Allie is, for sure, one of the cool kids. Best follow her lead… 😉

    Ha! This is an awesome flash. I love it. Thank you so much for joining in and writing your very first flash for this. I do hope it’s not your last. (Flash is addictive…)

    Thank you, again. 💕

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    1. Sarah, thanks for the compliment. I’ve no reason why I’ve never done this type of writing before, but I suspect, like you said, it could become an obsession. Thanks to you, and Allie P., for opening my eyes to the possibilities.

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    1. Allie P., I can imagine. When we were kids we were trapped at school for the exact same hours every day. But now, like you said, school days vary. Thanks for showing me the way with this flash fiction challenge. I think I like writing like this. ☺️

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    1. Janis, I like what you’re saying. I don’t quite know what to make of the lack of comments on this post, but I’m glad I tried writing flash fiction. Maybe when little Mirabelle tells me what her revenge is, I’ll write another story. You know they say that fictional characters talk to the author, so…

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  2. Hi Ally
    Stopped by in response to your tweet re conversations. From here it looks like maybe you just needed to wait for everyone to catch up 🙂
    Brilliant story, and I’d echo the sentiments above about wanting to read more of your stuff. Lots of prompts to play with on https://fictioncanbefun.wordpress.com, and we would be delighted to have you join in.


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    1. David, thanks for saying this. I did this piece of flash fiction just to see if I could write something fictional. My whole writing life has been factual, so I wondered if I could.

      It’s not that I’m a nut for comments, but it’s been unusual to see lots of people [more than normal] stop by and no one say anything. Difficult to know how to interpret that kind of silence, having never done anything like this before.

      However, be that as it may, thanks for the link. It sounds like it might be fun. Will check it out soon.


      1. Hmmm. I see what you mean. I guess I’m more used to that style of visitor – people reading the post and then moving on. It might be something to do with writing fiction? And also, when you write to that kind of prompt, you are going to get a lot of passing traffic following the # – no investment in your blog as a whole/personal connection. My 2 p, anyway.


        1. My stats are usually more along the line of 5 people leaving 100 comments, than 100 people leaving 5 comments. An exaggeration, but it’s a pattern I’m accustomed to. This “drive-by” style of blogging seemed odd to me, but now that you’ve explained it, I get it. How people communicate always fascinates me, and this is my latest learning experience.

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          1. It feels like the latest iteration in community – groups of people linked by how they use social media. It can feel uncomfortable when you start talking to a new group, because they use weird words, or words weirdly. People will soon be earning doctorates for studying this, I suspect.

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    1. Margaret, that’s funny. I bet that she’s forgiven you, but at the same time she’s playing mother/daughter mind games about remembering it. Just to keep you on your toes.


  3. This is really good. I’ve been browsing Sarah’s hurricane relief posts, so happy to be a part of it so I thought I’d check out other contributors. Hard to believe this is your first flash fiction. You should do more.

    I never left a child at school, but I was late a few times. They didn’t plot revenge…that I know of, anyway.

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    1. vanbytheriver, thank you. I’ve never even thought of trying flash fiction before this. I did this because the cause was [is?] a good one. As for your child not plotting revenge, you might want to remember that said child could have power of atty over you in your later years. Just saying, no disrespect intended. 😉

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